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Jagged P5 rough by *keithdraws:iconkeithdraws:

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Okay.. this is page 5 for jagged. But I'm not sure about the layout. I suspect that panel 6 should be moved to underneath panel 2 which means I have to re design panel 7.

What do you think. Does it read ok or does it fail?


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~xkillersmurfx Jun 23, 2009, 10:52:23 AM
looks good. I don't really see how the top 2 panels relate to the bottoms ones =/

but the bottom ones flow nicely, methinks.
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*keithdraws Jun 23, 2009, 10:56:47 AM
WEll Its coz didn't put the script up. Basically the terrorists are talking.. one looks out into the corridor, hears the bucket hit the wall and thinks its who they have been waiting for, so he rushes out (panel 4). And it s fairly obvious from there . :)

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~xkillersmurfx Jun 23, 2009, 11:01:30 AM
ohhhhh, well that makes sense lol. in that case it all flows nicely =)
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*keithdraws Jun 23, 2009, 11:02:15 AM
Thanks man :)

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~XwolfXbangXtroubleX Jun 23, 2009, 11:21:26 AM
Love the action on it!
I wasn't sure what was happening at first, but then I read the comments and figured it out. It makes sense to me.
Great job, and how many comics are you doing?
I'm just amazed with how you can go from BWM, to Jagged!

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*keithdraws Jun 23, 2009, 11:33:52 AM
Thanks, currently I'm working on 2 but I need to get stuck in to another 3. This one is just a six page sample, so I'm almost done with it :)

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~X-A-N-A Jun 23, 2009, 11:37:49 AM
Looks nice, I like the rough style (wish I could do that D: ) and whatnot. It's fairly readable, even for me, considering I don't read comics all that often!

PS: Good luck on the guns ;D

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~NyankoYue Jun 23, 2009, 11:57:39 AM
I think it's fine the way it is now!!!Can't find any problem with it!! ^^

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=dennisculver Jun 23, 2009, 12:21:34 PM
I think you're instincts are right about p6 or you could stretch 3 and 4 over 7 maybe...

As it stands right now my eye tends to find 6 last.

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